To Be a Good Poet...
(So I wrote this poem for a workshop in my Creative Writing class but most of the students had no idea what the point of this poem is. I've tried but I just can't change it, it feels so complete to me, and the critiques at school were not very helpful. Any suggestions to make it more understandable?)
...There’s a hundred things I could say.
The way the water closet wakes
to the clattering rain.
The way the cold morning stumbles
My body into the tub.
The way the hot drizzle melts
My frozen blood.
The way the streams cascade
amassing skin grease
through My hair
along My neck
over My collar bone
around My pex
dripping,
splattering,
swirling down the black hole.
The way showers inc. paste My words
to flow a slogan with their logo.
The way poet publishers copy My rights
and roll in the moldy dough.
The way rock bands sing My lyrics
to wash away the mess of yesterday.
The way a
in my greasy water.
to scrub off his dirt.
from last week.